Reviews for When Jealousy Strikes

jenjen-0 2008-05-17 ch 1,	abuseO sounds good! Loved the summary too, totally drew me in. :D update soon!
misery sister 2008-05-12 ch 1,	abuseOkay. The first line of your story shoudl make a reader want to review your story. If the first line of your story says that you suck at writing, why would we want to continue reading? It just makes me not want to read it anymore.
Social Recast 2008-05-11 ch 1,	abusewell.. first off, never say that your stories suck in the A/N. THat makes me think that it's worthless, an di shouldn't waist my time reading any of it. Second, you had some mistakes with grammar, and comma uses, and such. You prolly should get a beta (i would love to help.. erm, be ur beta * (: ) It's extremely short (try adding the day that they left, more thoughts, anythign to lengthen it a bit?), which makes me sad, becuase i think you have a good start to it. Then, some of your sentences were messed up, and you didn't have a paragraph style. Erm, and if you did, my computer is messed up. Well, i can't wait for the next chappie;; Update soon.