that was a really interesting read, wow r u lucky. :)
as for being called Lillywhite, that is quite cool if u ask me. much more interesting that being called Mary, or Sue or Jane. not there is anything wrong with those names, but you get my point.
still interesting to read.
Corey x

People are too serious with these things... you clearly said you wrote it a while ago, and that part of this are lies. They should just chill. Had a good laugh though

I recognize that this is supposed to be satire. I get it. I also get that you're making a point.

But I agree with some of the other reviewers--please, please check your spelling and grammar. Even if you are perfect in real life, bad grammar and typos make you look less-than-perfect in your writing. If you aren't perfect in real life (and I know you aren't), then still strive for it in your writing. It should be a matter of pride.

It doesn't take very long to read over and check for typos or spelling mistakes (by the way it's proficient not proficiant). We all make mistakes. But in an essay about being perfect (satire or no) it is really annoying to have to try to ignore spelling mistakes and poor grammar.

I can't say this enough--PLEASE PROOFREAD. The world would be a better place if everyone just followed this simple rule.

However, the idea behind this story is interesting. Even worse then that there are mistakes in the writing. The worst thing about fictionpress is reading stories with good concepts and poor writing. If you want people to take the time to read your work, then you should take the time to make it as good as it can possibly be.

I've never read anything so arrogant in my entire life. You are in LOVE with yourself, girl. Also, for someone ranging an I.Q. of 140 to 150, you don't exactly rock at grammar.

Of course, I hope this is a fake. If it is not... Damn, you are the most narcistic person I've ever read about. Which means you are not a Mary-Sue. One of the greatest Mary-Sue quality is modesty.

you're a total babe

Wow, Go you!

Yeah, perfect people get annoying. But as long as I don't meet you in person, I'm fine with you living a perfect life. You're lucky, live it because the rest of us can't.

However, you didn't talk about personality. From you're writing, you seem like the person that's got lots of energy, outgoing, not so dainty.

And for some people, that might not be good. They might believe that Mary Sue must also be a doll, able to sit in front of the queen and get genuine compliments. Who knows? I certainly didn't define the word...

But as long as you're nice (and you certainly seem nice) you're fine.

Yeah, God wants to be you (or perhaps you look just like god already?)

Well, although this had its funny parts, it was also very annoying to read. I mean, you Are all of the above, are you not? And that would be wonderful, really, I'd love it, if your grammar wasn't so heartbreakingly terrible. Go back and rewrite this, Ms. IQ of 140. You can't convince me that you're a Mary Sue if you're always writing loose when you should write lose, "some psychologistS" (notice the s at the end), and the whole "center of the graph" sentence makes no sense. You can't be talking about a bell curve because you've put yourself in the center. I realize that you have no need for proper grammar as a Kung Fu instructor, but Good GOD woman! I hope your books aren't as terribly written as this essay! Don't be lazy on the grammar. It hurts the eyes. Not to mention that it makes your entire point fall through (I know this is a fragment. Fragments are okay. I'm not a grammar Nazi, but reading badly written fictionpress writing makes me feel like I'M becoming dumber as a person).

"I kill people when I headbang"

Now THAT would be an awesome weapon for a Mary Sue. I'm just saying.

Oh, and that I love this story. I'm saying that also ^-^

...wow.

Really, wow. I can't believe you even wrote that. It has to be the most arrogant thing I've ever read in my entire life. I'm not saying that you shouldn't have written it, because if it's true it's true.

But it was also really depressing. Because... I'm not ugly, or stupid, or out of shape. I'm in pretty good shape, alright looking, and fairly smart (I graduated from high school at sixteen too, but I haven't actually started college yet. I'm 17). But to hear someone talk about how gorgeous, kick **, and intelligent they are is really depressing.

Seriously. People hate Mary Sues for a reason. >.<

It's cool that you can actually say that, though. I was thinking about taking martial arts, and whether I had the money or not. Would you say it's worth it? Oh, and where did you learn to use a sword and that other stuff?

Ah, this made me giggle. Constipated face person ( -_- ) should just be quiet, no one likes a moob.
...I do have to say though, I miss Alabaster Prince and Valkyrie Tempest. But save the world with your perfect hair first ^^

Dearest irritated face -_- ()

I would let it go usually, but now you’re insulting my readers… So just in case you care to check and see if I responded…

Do you not understand satire? Is that it? Alright, homework assignment—read ‘A Modest Proposal’ By Jonathon Swift. It’s a really great essay, and it may help you figure out how to tell the difference between serious and funzies. Also, read the author’s note, please. I explained that I lied about several facts, including the one you criticized me about on my other story—you would have known and avoided making a fool of yourself if you just read the note.

I’m pretty sure I know who you are, after reading the other notes you sent. No one appreciates internet cowardice, my friend. If you have something to say then say it without hiding behind an anonymous name. It’s just good manners, and then I can talk to you in private rather than posting a message publicly like this.

And, as I started to say before, leave the other readers alone. I’m sorry you didn’t enjoy the joke, but they did, there’s no reason to try to insult them when they’ve done nothing but offer glorious encouragement, that looks all the more golden when compared to your venom.

Oh, but you were right about one thing. I am VERY egotistical. You would be too, if you were this amazing.

Get over yourself!

I didn't need to know this, all I need to know - all ANYONE needs to know is that your are a good writer.

It is very off-putting to realise that the author is in fact in love with herself.

Eugh.

Ignore the fawning buffoons. They are, well - FAWNING BUFFOONS.

ROFL. I never knew the name Mary Sue had any meaning other than a tag! ...I suppose Archery and swordsmanship AREN'T ENTIRELY practical. But I have wanted to learn them for so long! CONGRATS! And good luck with the horse riding. I have always wanted to do that as well. As for your writing, I shall readily agree you are a 'Mary Sue'. ...I miss Valkyrie Tempest... :(...a lot.
Ah well. :/

LOL! If this is true of you, then man, you ARE a Mary Sue. (And yes, all that perfection CAN be annoying. :-P) By the way, I absolutely LOVED your last line. "Obviously, God wants to be just like me." That almost made me laugh out loud in real life. Amazing. :)

"Guess who’s gorgeous?!

I AM!"

XD