so Alistair in this story would meet that vampire who changed his brother?

This is definitely worth continuing !! I love every bit of it , yaoi , vampires , the whole lot ^_^ It would be awesomeness itself if you kept this one going .

oh my gosh vampyres and yaoi they totally go together especially if they are brothers.message me and give me and give me incest ideas.

It's really good, but the insest part kinda freaks me out, yet I like it anyway

First review! Yay!

Good start, I like the lure of a well-developed backstory, but I'd be careful of avoiding Info-Dumps. Readers get attached to characters over time in the story and it's very had to sympathize with a character you've just met. The readers tends to skip the backstory of the character to try to get to the immediate drama and action. I think perhaps cutting back some backstory in the first chapter would be helpful? I have a bad tendancy to skim though, so it may just be me.

I think it's definately worth continuing. I don't read a lot on FP anymore due to the general er.. lack of skill that pops up in majority, but your piece is lovely.

I like the original characters so far, but the backstory cut is the only think I have to offer in constructive criticism. Jumping straight into action and explaining as you go on will catch more readers I find ^^

Great start, I'll definately keep an eye on this piece.