Wow. This is...beautiful ! Morbid, but strangely sweet all the same - I just can't describe it lol.

Great work !

~Jo

this is really good.. a little angsty yes but moving all the same. its sort of almost a poem, almost a short story. you are very very talented :)

--Alex

This is a rather interesting piece of writing.

The style is quite different, and as you refrained from Author's Notes and the like, it was a thought-provoking piece.

There isn't a whole lot that was wrong with it, your spelling and grammar had no errors.

The length would normally put me off, but considering the style and the subject, I think you managed to capture enough to make it a good little ficlet in the 196 words that you did.

I'll be watching out for something a bit longer from you. :D