| Reviews for Beach |
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dragonflydreamer 5/13/08 . chapter 1This is a very beautiful hiaku. You used some wonderful vocabulary here and it was nice to start with that alliteration. I can practically see the ocean as I read this. Great job! :D |
thequeerprodigy 5/13/08 . chapter 1'evoking late memories' wow! this three-line haiku envisions a serene scene in a BEACH. |
A Once Dead Poet 5/12/08 . chapter 1I like the word choices. Lazing long winter the mind revives sand-warmed toes and ocean calmed heart |
massattraction 5/12/08 . chapter 1Nice mood, it captures a certain "nostalgia" if you will, i would take out the bold and italics though, let the reader put the emphasis on what they feel stands out. It'll carry more power that way. well done ] |
Moondog Dozier 5/12/08 . chapter 1Visual, with the movement of thought that a good haiku should have. Interesting burst at the end line. Well done. |