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dragonflydreamer
2008-05-13
ch 1,
abuseThis is a very beautiful hiaku. You used some wonderful vocabulary here and it was nice to start with that alliteration. I can practically see the ocean as I read this. Great job! :D
mapin
2008-05-13
ch 1,
abuse'evoking late memories'

wow! this three-line haiku envisions a serene scene in a BEACH.
Flaran
2008-05-12
ch 1,
abuseI like the word choices.

Lazing long winter
the mind revives sand-warmed toes
and ocean calmed heart
massattraction
2008-05-12
ch 1,
abuseNice mood,
it captures a certain "nostalgia" if you will,
i would take out the bold and italics though,
let the reader put the emphasis on what they feel stands out.
It'll carry more power that way.
well done =]
Moondog Dozier
2008-05-12
ch 1,
abuseVisual, with the movement of thought that a good haiku should have. Interesting burst at the end line. Well done.
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