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| The.Wizard.Pen.Dragon 2008-05-17 ch 1,  | abuseTHAT'S WHAT I'M TALKING ABOUT! I knew you had it in you! I liked how you used all those present tense verbs to make the reader feel like they are right there (and then they get caught up in it, and they fall right into your trap of a surprise ending! MWHAHAHAHA!-!-!)! But just so you know you spelled "maniac" wrong in the 1st sentence of the story (I've done the same thing, that's the only reason why I noticed.). Also, I liked your summary, it made it sound like an autobiography, which it could be, but it made the whole "becomeing fameous" sort of thing more ... normal (if that makes any sense at all). So OBVIOUSLY, GREAT STORY! Developed these skills and maybe even do a 55-word story someday! Write on! Pen.Dragon PS: Thanx for the props, they'll come in handy next time I'm in a play. |
| Smiles234 2008-05-12 ch 1, | abuseI loved it. It was short, but it flowed and was very creative. Smiles234 |