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eine.hexe
2008-07-21
ch 1,
abuseFirst of all, this must have been given a lot of thought... If not, then you are simply a genius! I read it word by word and this is what I find extremely interesting, pretty much brilliant:

"Teardrops kiss our cheeks"

I noticed you used the entrance word "teardrops", which gives the poem A LOT of ambiguity, since you let the reader imagine either a blissful setting (tears of happiness and joy) or a sorrowful setting (tears of sadness and mourning).
Furthermore, I love the use of the word "whisper", I think it is a great personification of the teardrops.
And then, the last thing that I really found great was the last line
"beckon us to play"
if the reader regards rain as a depressing state, then this line is so wonderfully inappropriate since it underlines the joy and playfullness in which it is viewed by the writer in contrast with the word "teardrops".


So, yeah, I love it... hope you don't mind I analyzed it a bit the way I see it... it might not be correct, but it's my point of view. Keep up the good work :)
Siren-esque
2008-07-19
ch 1,
abuseBeautiful haiku. There's sometihng to be said about childish innocence
Dolvich
2008-07-18
ch 1,
abusedragonflydreamer-

your haiku is great
you make the reader feel like
the downpour is real

sorry, I couldn't resist. Seriously, I like it. Speaks very clearly, and is a pleasure to read.

Dolvich
english summer rain
2008-07-14
ch 1,
abusei'm a sucker for haikus and personification. haha, i like how you've mixed it around and instead of putting the concluding sentence as the last line, you've put it first. so it's not really a concluding sentence anymore, is it? i'm confusing myself. well it's pretty anyhow, haiku's hold this simplicity that doesn't need the use of complex vocabulary, and you've displayed that well :) love it.
Isca
2008-07-05
ch 1,
abuseI admire your ability to write stunning haiku's! :)
Heloise
2008-06-24
ch 1,
abuseWow. That's really beautiful. I love it. I like how you compared rain and teardrops. =)
Jesusfreak43091
2008-06-22
ch 1,
abusethats beautiful! i like how you use play on words, and i really like the comparison of rain drops to teardrops =]
miscellanea
2008-06-04
ch 1,
abuseThis was definitely very pretty - nice haiku.
Katenheimer
2008-06-02
ch 1,
abuseI like it! It reminds me of some playful times in the rain as a kid. :) Very well done-kudos.
simpleplan13
2008-06-01
ch 1,
abuseThis is really awesome personification. I love it. Awesome job.
Mahone-chic-89
2008-05-30
ch 1,
abusevery cute! short and sweet.
You should write more!

~L
Smiling Serenade
2008-05-22
ch 1,
abuseVery subtle and amazing personification.
I adored this.
It captured the essence and beauty of rain.
(:
Sercus Kaynine
2008-05-17
ch 1,
abuseSercus Kaynine from Fight for the Freebie here!

I really like how the entire thing was made up of metaphors. It added a surreal, magical quality to them poem, which is hard with just a short haiku.

I'm finding it incredibly hard to find something bad about this, so I'll say another thing I liked. I adored the poem's playful tone. It was pleasant to hear (err... read) and went along well with the words you used. Usually poems about rain are sad and deep, but this one was light and easy to laugh to.

Awesome work on this!
snowdance-lyghtning
2008-05-17
ch 1,
abuseI love the rain. Especially in the summer. Great job on personifying that in the haiku!
Clarelouise
2008-05-13
ch 1,
abuseThis is really nice, short of course as its a haiku but very effective. I like the way you make the raindrops playful, one of many ways they could be interpreted and a very original one. Well done :)
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