I like piece a lot. I especially love the third and fourth line because it's so realistic. None of us are ever one thing, but we dramatize everything and won't admit like the fourth line does that maybe it's just a rough patch.

I also like the phrase "secrets swarm" that was nice alliteration and an interesting description. Great piece.

PS If youre bored this weekend check out the Review Game's Review Marathon (link in my profile).