An interesting idea. The voice of the narrator is annoying, but realistic, they way they constantly say "of course this would happen..." like the world is conspiring against them. You have a different sort of monster in this, thought the hands reminded me of evil dead a little, thats good not bad. The text where you have changed the formatting looks cool and isn't something I've seen on here before so kudos. You build the tension a little bit, but maybe some false alarms would help too. We all hate those predicatble things in horror movies, but they do nonetheless build tension. Nice work... keep writing!