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| The Un-great-ful 2008-05-13 ch 1,  | abuseIf you dumped the "ye olde English" styling it'd be much better. I can see you've got some talent, in some places you even reminded me of a more timid version of myself. Not too bad mate, some good imagery here. Take care :) Alan. |