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simpleplan13 2008-05-21 . chapter 1
I can’t believe he hurt me/And not even care at all... those two tenses are not the same

I like the thing about your friends because that's very true to life. Also like the ending... very jaded.
kloun mannequin 2008-05-15 . chapter 1
it's brokenheart by the way but it seems there's a lot of hope without giving up in love.
Yusuf 2008-05-13 . chapter 1
A heart doth be same
For years to come
A quest for love that won't end
Till you find the one

Nicely written... sad, but nice.

~Yusuf
.unuttered.thoughts. 2008-05-13 . chapter 1
this is rather nice, but sad. but its always good to pick up the pieces
(i dont have much in the form of constructive criticism, but i can say its not your best work, but still rather good)
Kiss.Today.Goodbye 2008-05-13 . chapter 1
A familiar topic, but you might as well leave it up, it's part of your collection of work.

Sometimes the rhythm is a bit off and I feel you could have made use of punctuation to improve the piece, but it was an interesting read.
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