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| simpleplan13 2008-05-21 ch 1,  | abuseI can’t believe he hurt me/And not even care at all... those two tenses are not the same I like the thing about your friends because that's very true to life. Also like the ending... very jaded. |
| kloun doll 2008-05-15 ch 1, | abuseit's brokenheart by the way but it seems there's a lot of hope without giving up in love. |
| Yusuf 2008-05-13 ch 1, | abuseA heart doth be same For years to come A quest for love that won't end Till you find the one Nicely written... sad, but nice. ~Yusuf |
| Schizophrenic.iv-personalit... 2008-05-13 ch 1, | abusethis is rather nice, but sad. but its always good to pick up the pieces (i dont have much in the form of constructive criticism, but i can say its not your best work, but still rather good) |
| Kiss.Today.Goodbye 2008-05-13 ch 1, | abuseA familiar topic, but you might as well leave it up, it's part of your collection of work. Sometimes the rhythm is a bit off and I feel you could have made use of punctuation to improve the piece, but it was an interesting read. |