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simpleplan13 2008-05-30 ch 1,	abuse-I turn my eyes away/you ask me if I'm ok?... that's not a question -why didn't you ask me the same/?... that line totally confused me -a hungry one with frighten look...frightened -not doing me any favor...favors -if you want me to ask you sorry/want me more...that confused me to -Blindfold me (let's see)... if you're blindfolded, wouldn't you be able to to look at the sun? -That owner stanza made no sense to me -tore dress and cheap make-up...torn Why are the parts in parenthesis double spaced? That seemed odd The words and ** aren't really appropriate for 9 year olds if you ask me... I would definitely change the rating I really like the parts where you say do this and let's see if I can do this. Those were really great. Some of the other parts were great descriptions too. I also liked the formatting with the parenthesis. But some of the piece just really confused me.
The Reverse Edge Blade 2008-05-14 ch 1,	abuseI liked your repetitions, and the description of your emotions. I liked how you repeated certain words, and the theme. Your rhyming was also really good! Keep at it! The Reverse Edge Blade
Dreaming Chica 2008-05-13 ch 1,	abuseFantastic! A very inspiring poem, that really makes you think about how it can relate to you or someone you know! Well done! ♥ Dreaming Chica ♥
The Un-great-ful 2008-05-13 ch 1,	abuseYes, plenty of hate here, I like hate. Alan.