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Reviews For: Memory of A Tree

Ramenluver
2008-06-10
ch 1,
abuseI really, really like this. ^ ^ All I can suggest is that you soften the transition between the lines:

"all you have is a memory" and

"when Love in her innocence"

and "introduced us to Pain" and

"i may never get to sing again"

because the subject changed in those lines rather abrubtley, and I think maybe you should add a line or two in order to make the transition a bit smoother.

-Ramen
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