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| xx.Shattered.Reality.xx 2008-06-02 ch 1,  | abuse"moonbeams see the best in me..." So true, and it fits perfectly in this poem. Nice work! |
| habsrock08 2008-05-26 ch 1, | abuseThat was an *awesome* poem. great symmetry...loved it! cheers, Habs :D |
| poetofpain 2008-05-25 ch 1, | abuseI like this, it's good. I think my favorite part of it is the last two lines |
| East-0f-Eden 2008-05-23 ch 1, | abuseI actually thought it was quite good. It has a dark romance about it. I never thought that about starlight before. But you're right you know. |
| Scarlett Wynter 2008-05-23 ch 1, | abuseeven if you were a "poetic noob" when you wrote this, it's still very good. I like the last two lines the best. |
| Satsumaimo 2008-05-22 ch 1, | abuseThis is beautiful. I'm a sucker for poems that have the moon in it, haha. |
| fallenflame13 2008-05-18 ch 1, | abuseI enjoyed the imagery. The rhyming was lovely also. Good job. |
| Aelfin 2008-05-18 ch 1, | abuseteehee =] you couldn't be a poetic noob if you TRIED, Isca! This is fantastic. 'moonbeams see the best in me.' Thats such an amazing line, i love it! Aelfi x |
| Moon's Poetess 2008-05-14 ch 1, | abuseHaha, may be a poetic noob as you described yourself, but I like this anyway =) The last line was perfect. I'd only comment about the comma after the "But" in the second and second-to-last line (ooh, just noticed the mirror there! nice!)... actually, nevermind. I like it how it is ^^ Haha. Moon's Poetess |
| Nemonus 2008-05-13 ch 1, | abuseI like this. The rhythm isn't perfect but it's there, and the comparison between the wilting, setting things of the daylight and the "moonbeams" that "see the best in me" (good turn of phrase there) is good. |
| AK the Twilight 2008-05-13 ch 1, | abuseThis poem, despite being written ages ago, is actually quite beautiful. There's a sense of finality in the last line, which is good, but it could've been a bit longer and more intricate to be something truly explanatory. This is good. Be proud of this. It's really very good. |
| Manifest-Destiny-x X 2008-05-13 ch 1, | abusei think that the conclusion that you reach in this piece is very good (though the road is a bit rocky) anyway... I like it overall. |