oh, i like this one

I like the line about chopping off dignity's head, and the wuddle bit about a key that never locks. You used some interesting bits in the poem. As always, the rhythm could maybe use some tightening up, but I'm sure that'll come with time. Otherwise, good poem.

Just Alice

xD- I really liked this one. It's a theme I've used a couple of times myself- a young woman driven mad by the world around her.
The rhythm could use some tweaking once more. Just a word or two added or taken away in places could help your rhythm flow a lot better... but then it's not my poem, it's yours I guess. (shrug)

JustAlice

P.S. I like the name Lavinia. Did you make it up or find it on a website? If the former, could I steal it for some kind of story?

P.P.S Poor you- no one else reviewed this chapter. This review must be extra long as a result.

P.P.P.S I look forward to the sequel to this, if there will be one.

P.P.P.P.S I like muffins.

Good word choice. However, at the end you put a comma...(?)

Nice.
-DV-

This is no doubt the best. Masterful.

-DV-

I've noticed a lot of the schemes are similar. I would like to see some changed up.

Keep writing.
-DV-

Liked this one. The rhyme scheme was very interesting.

Have a good day, keep writing
-DV-

Wow, hauntingly...amazing with just a touch of humor. I really like this poem. Good job! :)
-mitsuke

I think tghis is the worst poem of the lot. That is saying something...

hm. This is not your best poem, not that i can write poetry, but i think you need to check the rythem

It makes no sense, but who cares!

Hmm...
Alice doesn't think this one is quite as good as your other ones... good, but not quite as good.
The rhythm was a little off in places, and I think it could use work, but you have an interesting poem in the makings. ^_^ (shrugs) Your others, I love to bits though.

JustAlice

Hmm, one of the best. i also like One bloody Mary Please

Nice! It's good to see people can write poetry about wanting and liking life, rather than just hating everything. I've gone into crazy punk anarchist mode, so, I guess I can write happy stuff now... hmm... happy stuff...
(wanders off to write something that will probably turn into crazy emo gothic stuff)

Isilthrar

Ooh- are you annoyed at the world, or yourself, or something else entirely?
Heh. Again, I like the repetition of the first verse, and the idea of 'turning off life's light,' though, I really hope you don't. The world needs its Emilie Autumn Lover's, and its writers, and its crazy people...
Heh. Good poem.

Isilthrar