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LivingLifeOnceMore
2008-05-24
ch 1,
abuseAww. This poem is great. It reminds me of my ex boyfriend. We were together for over a year... thought we were in love. Then one day we just fell apart and that was that. We were over. Times are short so cherrish them while they're there.
Yusuf
2008-05-19
ch 1,
abuseA couple typos, but I like this. Reminded me of a friend with whom my frienship recently ended.

~Yusuf
Take the Money and Run
2008-05-17
ch 1,
abuseThis is really sad, and the details, like 'or not even say a word to me online' make it realistic and let the emotion come across well. I can relate to it, too, once my friend sort of didn't talk to me for a while and now it seems like it never happened. Anyway,, nice job.
Moon-Chaser
2008-05-17
ch 1,
abuseThis is beautiful, really heartfelt and hopefully everything turned out okay with you and your friend. This reminds me so much of a friend and I. It is crazy how people can just stop something, act like it never happened.

keep it up.
kloun doll
2008-05-15
ch 1,
abuseit reminds me of when I had a fight with a friend, well, it's horrible when you don't know very well why your friend got mad at you.
Kiss.Today.Goodbye
2008-05-14
ch 1,
abuseI like the start; It's reflective and sweet.

I think this might work better in verses to convey the different stages. Also, perhaps, with a more aligned line length.

In "My heart is braking" I think you meant "breaking" .

Keep going,
ImoT
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