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| LivingLifeOnceMore 2008-05-24 ch 1,  | abuseAww. This poem is great. It reminds me of my ex boyfriend. We were together for over a year... thought we were in love. Then one day we just fell apart and that was that. We were over. Times are short so cherrish them while they're there. |
| Yusuf 2008-05-19 ch 1, | abuseA couple typos, but I like this. Reminded me of a friend with whom my frienship recently ended. ~Yusuf |
| Take the Money and Run 2008-05-17 ch 1, | abuseThis is really sad, and the details, like 'or not even say a word to me online' make it realistic and let the emotion come across well. I can relate to it, too, once my friend sort of didn't talk to me for a while and now it seems like it never happened. Anyway,, nice job. |
| Moon-Chaser 2008-05-17 ch 1, | abuseThis is beautiful, really heartfelt and hopefully everything turned out okay with you and your friend. This reminds me so much of a friend and I. It is crazy how people can just stop something, act like it never happened. keep it up. |
| kloun doll 2008-05-15 ch 1, | abuseit reminds me of when I had a fight with a friend, well, it's horrible when you don't know very well why your friend got mad at you. |
| Kiss.Today.Goodbye 2008-05-14 ch 1, | abuseI like the start; It's reflective and sweet. I think this might work better in verses to convey the different stages. Also, perhaps, with a more aligned line length. In "My heart is braking" I think you meant "breaking" . Keep going, ImoT |