Reviews for The Forgotten Legend

Reviews For: The Forgotten Legend

Nabolion 2008-07-02 ch 4,	abuseGreat work! I really like this story. Keep up the good work and update soon.
Marginal Love 2008-07-02 ch 1,	abuseHey there! Forgot to review earlier... okay... anyway, this was actually pretty good, few awkwardness, but it's all good! It's long too!
TJ Smartypants 2008-06-18 ch 1,	abuseThe characters are diverse, I like that. Long enough for me, but may I suggest a little more atmospheric detail? Good Job
Tawny Owl 2008-06-17 ch 1,	abuseThis has the potential to be a really intereting story. There are quite a few mysteries waiting to be solved. Like how Dante ended up with his metal arms, and what Felix is up to. You do keep changing between past and present tense though which is a bit distracting. I liked the image of when Clyde found the sword as well, and it was on the stone floating in space. It was very vivid. I'd like to know more about the world you're creating at well. At first I thought it was modern day and Leonardo and Felix were frome somewhere else. They seemed happy using phones though, and Clyde was unphased by seeing someone with a sword. I like Valerie, although she isn't in the first chapter much, she seems clever and sympathetic. I'd like to see her develop more.
Feere Gorone 2008-05-14 ch 1,	abuseIt's kinda okay. I was kinda wondering about all the spiky hair, but then, it is manga. But there were many gramatical mistakes. You kept on switching between past and present tense, and there were many times where you had forgotten to add simple words like "he" or "she". As well as that, you didn't need the word 'also" in the sentance: "Clyde dismissed the Diamond Blade and also walked up to him and saw that he was unconscious." Fized, that sentance would be: "Clyde dismissed the Diamond Blade and walked up to him, seeing that he was unconscious." Other than that, it has a good story so far. Make sure you carefully edit and revise before posting new chapters.

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