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| Copper Noko 2008-06-04 ch 1,  | abuseI like this. Short sweet and to the point!! Oh and BTW thanks for not being to mad at my criticalness!! LOL! -Copper P.S. You may critique MY stories too!! It'd actually be appreciated!! |
| .mate.feed.kill.repeat. 2008-05-14 ch 1, | abuseI like it. The short four lines said quite a bit, actually. The rhythm and the flow were very nice, too. I especially like how you got it to rhyme (something I almost never do). You missed the apostrophe in the word "world's." This was a really nice piece to read. Nice work. -stix- |
| La-Jari 2008-05-14 ch 1, | abuseI like this.. it is short but to me is speaks What I get from it: Things in life that are forgotten.. and the only way we will hear is if we pause and perk up our ears to hear. Because its there ready for us to listen. Lol i may be wrong but thats my understanding of it... Tell me what you were after while writing |