This one is much calmer than the few others I've read that you've written.

I like the rhythm and the rhyming pattern; it was really subtle until I started to think about it and look for it. This flowed really well. The descriptions were really unique, especially the last line. I like "nowhere feet." It makes no sense to me when I actually think it through, which actually makes me smile.

This was a really good piece.

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