Good bit of action. You obviously have a direction in where you want to go with this. The questions you raise are thought-provoking in a good way. I would expect the characters to feel more disconnected from society over their looks/powers but they must feel some sort of reassurance for the agency they work for. Interesting.

Interesting ideas and good questions are raised with this story. I see a vast amount of potential in this piece and I only hope it grows as it goes on.

Your characters are fine by this point. It's only the first chapter anyway. Hope to see more about them.

Nice im adding this to my favorites list thanks for the read.

You must write!

The first note I have for this one is “Edge? Edge! Do NOT get in the shower with her!” I seriously thought he was going to. (“I’ll be out in a minute.” “It’s alright.” Pulls back curtain. “WHAT ARE YOU DOING?!”)

/Anyways/, Marshall being “insanely” jealous made me laugh out loud, no joke.

Awesome fight in this chapter, especially with the part with the dangling out the window and Kat's super nails and stuff. Yes. The Wild cats are fierce, but Marshall and Edge are fiercer! Fist pump!

I still don’t like Leon. And I’m still getting this dark, powerful mix of pity and hate towards the wildcats. I don’t know how you do it, but it’s brilliant. Also, “slithered” is a good descriptor for a smirk.

I'm on a roll here! Two moments in the same chapter when the phrase "Bamf, did I call it or did I call it?" applies. :)

And ooh, an exciting fight scene! *bites nails* NALE!

First off, Duke and the Lynx Twins?! That was a moment of total shock! I scribbled a reaction in the margin, and what little was not in a foreign script said: O_O O

“Marshall yawned and pulled his pistol from behind her back” If I were Duke? Honestly? I’d dive for cover.

An excellent image I noted was “noticing a clean mark where it had been on my wrist.” Ew. But excellent.

I can hear Marshall’s voice when she says, “’Special breakfast, all rooms eat for free!’” XD Smooth!

I was expecting a little more fear from Mrs. West (strangers bursting through your door instead of room service is always disconcerting), but meh. It’s in her character to be very brave, very pro-duty. Or “ballsy” as I put it.

I love when Edge blurts out Marsh’s family history! Time for the SMACK DOWN!

In response to the Author’s Note: WAH! Sorrysorrysorry! Here you are giving the world this wonderful story, and I can’t even be bothered to print it out read it in study hall! Some reader I am.

I was convinced the first paragraph was a dream sequence- until Edge showed up. Marshall would never dream about Edge! d: He probably dreams about her though, judging by that adorable line, “All I need and all I could ever want are in this room.” Aww.

“Do I tell him what really happened with Duke?” Nono, don’t tell! It’ll make it harder to work as a team when you and Duke meet up! (And Dash too. Dash must join the team.)
But how will Marshall react? “And I forgive you.” Huh?! Edge shares my surprise! Aww, don’t leave mad, Edge… T^T He’s makin’ me sad.

But not as sad as when they get in the truck! NO~! Every good evil empire keeps a GPS in the truck and a record of online history!! ...That being said, it's awesome that Duke can summon trucks without question.

Yayz! Marshall's conscious again! It's good to have her narrating again. ^^ I love the part where they jump over the turnstile. It's so cute and light compared to the dark things going down lately.

When they relaxed in the Director’s room, I went, “I smell a trap…” And lo and behold, it switches to Duke!

O_O D-Duke…? They’re going to…? And he’s going to- GLEE! This is gunna be SUPER AWKWARD!

^^ Tabby's good at swiping things. I'm surprised they've been paying for anything at all!

Linx Twins... Marsh wasn't the first hybrid?! Hmm, this eliminates one of the last similarities to Maximum Ride, and it gives /very/ interesting insight on Marshall's character. Awesome.

“A yell from further down the hall caused Duke’s lips to pull at the corner” X| Ouchouchouch, poor Tig! This section inspires a nice mix of hate and sympathy.

I really like the details in this chapter. They give a good picture of what's going on without dragging down the pacing.

(I'm not dead!! Sorry it's taken me so long, and I'm doubly sorry these next reviews are going to be hasty! Okay, here goes, my first review on FictionPress of the new year…)

Aw, poor Marshall. I really like how Marshall is showing her emotions to the team, and how the dream scene sounds like a real nightmare she'd be having. I'm glad her team is around to try and make her feel better.

Heheh, Hale loves~ Edge! Or maybe he's just super competitive. "If James West can give his life to protect Marshall then why can’t I for Edge?” :D Oh, and Whitmore is without a doubt the antagonist of the story. Evil son of a she-dog...

I love the story, very well written. I can see it being played in my head. I can't wait to see what you got cooking.

Yee! I think it's Dash that let them out. If not, you're the master of deception and I'm looking the wrong way right now! If it was Dash, you could conceal her identity with a simple editing out of "whoever it was must have been a fast and light runner". (That just a suggestion, I won't try to cramp your style. :)

This chapter has such a great fight scene (all the fight scenes are great, but I haven't said it for a while) The third person takes it out of the "fog of war" feeling nicely. Tabby's kick-butt skills are a good reminder that she’s not the damsel in distress of this story, and she's also pretty brave for nodding while there's a knife at her neck! The conversation-while-fighting shtick always gets me smiling, and having it between Nale and Dash is no exception. Lol, just lol.

The ending is sudden, I don’t know, I guess my pyro side wanted a little more description of the field being set aflame when the helicopter “lands”. And I wonder what happens to poor Clive...

Good~ read. You’ve made this pyro very happy. C: Now, to listen to the song this is currently named after!

Protective Edge is incredibly lovable. "Thanks for kneeing me in the balls by the way." XD I just love all the funny little comments like that, especially the ones aimed at the authority figures. Hilarious~! Chuckles the Supreme Overlord really didn't think his plan through, heheh. I wonder why Clive's still hanging around? He's a brave fellow, very brave. And I just realized they're in the exact same position they were in the beginning. Oh, the irony.

I now get why Dash is in love with that manipulative little shumityshumitygrgle... Leon. At least he's being tormented with the suggestion that they're not as clever as he thinks! That makes me happy in a sadistic kind of way. Insert vampire grin.

Writer's block is beyond frustrating, so I'm glad it looks like you got through it! Now, reactions in order of occurrence:

TABBY! Phew. At least Hale's a little attached to Edge, or else the worst could've happened. O_O And looks like the plan's done for. But, if plans ever worked, stories just wouldn't be stories! I like the ominous phrasing in that "You'd have to ask Marshall...this was all her idea." Past tense makes everything bleak and pessimistic.

Aha, that's why she knew what Simba was! Great detail, it explains past behavior and humanizes Marsh more than any other detail so far. Taser... one word: OUCH. One word for Duke: "UNWANTED!" I mean really! When did you get the idea that was okay behavior, Duke?! ... Gah!!

By the way, when I start yelling at fictional characters, that means it's a good chapter. ^^;