Reviews for string of fate - FictionPress.com

thursdays and rain 2008-06-09 ch 1,	abusewonderful descriptions.. vivid.. nicely written ;)
simpleplan13 2008-05-24 ch 1,	abusebetween you & i?.. this might be intentional, but it's actually me I like the way the story in this piece flows with the whole strings and lines things because it was interesting and attached the different pieces of it. I also like the format because the parenthesis seemed to work well in the piece. PS If youre bored this weekend check out the Review Game's Review Marathon (link in my profile)
The Postscript 2008-05-17 ch 1,	abuseGorgeous diction and imagery. The poem really builds to the ending. I especially love the alliteration on "teardrops tumble" and the lines "i'll take a step forward/i'll be the first to reach you." Amazing job ... I think this poem does a really good job of painting this vivid attraction and repulsion concept pertaining to a connection with others. Keep writing, k.
Chi 2008-05-17 ch 1, anon.	abuseHm... i like it, its deep and rooted but the flow needs to be fixed a bit. And you should try to stay away from repeating the same words more then once unless it follows a certain pattern. But keep it up. You'll be fine
kloun doll 2008-05-15 ch 1,	abusewow, that's wonderful, the imagery is very sweet and nice.