Creepy-ish, but still undeniably fabulous.

so long as there's a happy ending. ;) this makes me think of missed opportunities...

this is creepyish and wierd but cool and i like it )

An amazingly lovely story, I needed that I think ) Really interesting style - gave it a simplicity... and an immediacy I suppose. Just.. Aw. Soulmates and such can't be beaten

"A guy won’t wait around forever, even one as determined as what he seems to be.”

-i think you meant 'even one as determined as he seems to be'?

"The other was wearing blue jeans, black converse and a white t-shirt."

-'black Converses'

there were a few other very small grammar/punctuation errors, but they're not that noticeable.

anyway, i really liked this one-shot! the simple, straightforward style made it unique, easy to read and understand. write more of these 8D

one thing though - i looked at your profile and noticed that your chapter stories are also in this style of writing. while it's excellent for poems and one-shots, it's not suggested for long stories. it's kind of a novel turn-off, really.

good luck on the rest of your works!

axidentilly on perpuss

*sigh* I love this story.

I thought it was pretty cute! haha. But one point though, it's kind of hard/ long to read because the entire story is in singular lines. Not quite sure whether it was meant to be written that way on purpose or not, but it's my view.

Wow, you're on a roll! I loved this one too;)!

this is the longest one-shot i've ever read xD

i loved it. it was kinda sad and depressing, yet really cute.

i felt bad for kohen, because he was so much in love with ari and couldn't make her love him back.

i was proud of kohen, because he was strong enough to stop. jeez, he must be really stubborn. three times 365 is what ... over a thousand days of stalking xD

and now i feel really happy, that they both met again and realized they were meant to be together.

it was an awesome story, and i hope you'll be back with more

keep it up!