That was excellent. I have some weird weakness for pieces that switch POV's. Brook's was my favorite, probably because it showed the most plot. Also, the image of a blind girl whacking people about the ankles with her cane was amusing. I liked Matt's second-best and Luke was third. Sorry, I just couldn't get into Rebekkah... even though, in that, she and I probably would have had the same role. Huh. Well, nice work. I hope you're proud of this one.

I wasn't actually expecting Christian to be a ghost and that was kind of a weird twist on it for me...but whatever. :P
This was captivating. VERY and EXTREMELY captivating. This is an excellent, EXCELLENT piece of writing. :)

How sad. I think--I think I almost shed a tear!

O.O

TT-TT

I can imagine someone like Christian. I can imagine not knowing someone very well but suddenly having them taken away from you and wondering, just wondering and not understanding, why it hurt so much. But it hurts. I know what it's like, so I could relate.

I like having all the different points of views of the students. It made it seem more real. More deep. Everyone thought something different about him. I liked that.

The fact that he was a ghost, though, bewildered me. I think it was sadder when I thought he was just some kid who got murdered. Somehow it didn't seem as real anymore, and I couldn't relate as much.

But it was still a very sweet piece.

Whoa, crazy twist there at the end. I thought he had some disability or something, but wow, a ghost.

I really like how you switch perspectives. It gives a lot more, getting all these sides to the story.
I like the amoun of dialogue too, not too much, not too little.
Good work!

That was a great start, I think. It's a great idea too, chilling yet captivating. I little bit more prose would do good, and I understand that the use of casual language captures the teenagers' thoughts, but it's music, isn't it? Just try a little bit, or maybe a bit more. I do hope you find that helpful!

Wow, this is great. Emotional, and short...I love it. Makes me feel like I was there with them.