ooh, what a wonderful idea, an Indian version of Cinderella! There are hardly any desi stories, and what a culture to share!

Anyway, I am waiting for your re-write, put in more desi stuff for sure..

Check out my story, I would appreciate it

/s/2600520/1/Barakah_Mercy

It was awesome! More soon!

:)

This was a really nice start. The one thing I didn't like was the first switch from Diya's POV to Kartik's it felt like it was too sudden for me and this Kartik character just appeared out of nowhere in the middle of Diya's story.