AWESOMEE STORY LAWL SHELY IS SUCH A ** LAWL

this is really really good!! i like it so far, please write another chapter soon!

What, no Author's note? That's a bit unusual. But I'll give you an A+ for putting a cliffhanger - sort of - at the end of this chapter. Hey, and please, when you finish this revised story, don't remove the original one. It would be nice to compare them and all, and I think some people might be quite hardcore fans of your original work.

Well, I can't say the original version was crap. I really liked it, you know? You didn't edit much in this chapter, but I agree that it sounds better.

See now...It would be wrong to knock the hell out of Shelly for walking up to Allory at lunch like that right?

Dont start mess like that unnecessarily Shelly. Cuz then you're just asking for it!

BTW...love the name Allory.

I like the start of this! It looks good, I'll have to watch for updates!

~Tzotel

shelly is a **. i hope she gets ignored by them all, friends just don't do that. ahh well, good chappie.

Somehow this chapter seemed rushed. And Allie's behavior was less believable this time. I believed her in the first chapter. She has a short temper, no? I do too, but when I really blow up...it's not pretty I'm sure.

Update soon as per usual.

COME ON! u leave us like that.. hahaha . does she say yes or no? update soon!

Oh, my God! You're alive!! You're alive!

I'm glad you decided to revise this story. It's a great story, you just lost steam on it. I sincerely hope you can keep it up to the end.

I still like Allie or is it Allory? Justin's a jerk, yeah. Like an older brother should be. Damn, I'd be ** at him every day if he was my brother. I'd hit him. And Jess...Is she a new character? I don't remember her... And yeah, Tyler. I'd hate him but secretly think he's hot.

Update soon!

Hey...like I said,I'm happy this one is back also,

hm..i remember this from ages ago! can't wait for more to see what happens ~ Alenor.

lol! funny!

hahah omg that is brilliant this story is brillaint hahahah

I thought this was a good start, hope you manage to continue with it.