Very, very, VERY scary--I especially liked how you did the rising action to the climax. Yeesh, that gave me goosebumps.

You're a very talented writer.

Haunting. The POV was amazing. Keep up the good work!

Oh my god...

That was so well written. I loved all the childish points, like "I can count to twenty". its chilling because I felt for the little boy (I'm the oldest, too), but I can't imagine killing my little sister.

All in all, this was awesome!

This is awesome, scary but awesome. How did you come up with this idea?

I love it, well written

O.O
Whoa.
That was terribly disturbing. But I love how well you captured the naivete of a small child. There is nothing creepier than a child with an agenda...
Wow.

Hm. That's a very, very interesting story. Pretty good ^_^ I liked the way you tied in the five-year-old innocence with dark, twisted thoughts.

Very good!

-Deirdru

Wow... somewhere in that simple writing there was a mastery of suspense. I didn't really like the childlike voice, as this can be sort of irritating but I realised that if it was bad I would have stopped reading. The dolls are demonic, but I'm sure the kid was messed up, not them. I didn't think I would but when I read the part about "mommy's bedroom" I found it hard to read. You had built up so well... I dunno what to say. I was wondering how he would kill Ashley with the scissors, maybe cut little bits off... I was expecting a lot more description so I nearly missed the line "I put the scissors in her chest." Maybe you could use some formatting, but you don't want peopel to notice it before they get there... No errors that I could see, it must have been hell trying to spell check this... Nice work and Nice writing

This was way disturbing. Beyond disturbing.

This kept my short attention span the entire way through. It was well-written and I had to go to the end, or I would've written it in my mind as I am falling asleep tonight, which would've been bad.

Nice job.

-stix-