Great title.

Your writing reminds me of my own, so I like it. :P

Interesting sights in this piece.

Brilliant!

on my language exam i took last week, there was this one question that i just couldn't figure out, and it asked about self-awareness.

it was like: what word best describes what self-awareness means in line 56 (or w/e)?

and the two choices that i just couldn't decide between were introversion and shame. because usually introversion is a go-for, but shame really was the result and almost type of this introversion. so i chose introversion, and i'm still not sure if it's right.

your fish gave my mind faulkner undertones for the entire piece. :p

which is funny because i always associate him with sawdust too. and your next lines were about timber.

:) and which was also funny when you started beoing a woman.

haha i have too much fun reading cryptic poetry :(

the symbolism in your second "i am" is really weird.

like in a good way, of course, but still very odd.

i was about to say i'm not sure if i understand 'pins' with the breath. but then i realized breath fell under a new "i am"

and now i love it so scratch that

this is a really tricky poem. clever too. but really tricky.

great job. beautiful piece, i think. ty.