 a silenced revolution 2008-05-25 . chapter 1i rather like the overall sense of... strangeness, i guess. the idea of judges spitting and flying and God making the water hot
lends the poem originality. i can't really tell what it's about, but the words sound good in the way you've arranged them. especially love the first line; very evocative imagery. nice job.
-adrian, from the review marathon (link in my profile). |