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| The Demonic Angel 2008-06-07 ch 1,  | abusethis was...a little different to some of the stuff i have read, but its good ^^ |
| Midnights Scream 2008-06-03 ch 4, | abuseIt's an interesting plot in a smutty way, but I feel I need to give helpful advice. You go very fast on all your scenes and I think if you went into more detail and slowed down a bit it'd be better. Also, you have the same bad habit that I do when it comes to description. You're very blunt and put all the facts right out there, but in writing it sound so much better if you have put tiny hint of description everywhere instead of being super blunt. It's good and interesting though. I like it, but I know I like people telling me how my story could be better. great job! |
| Midnights Scream 2008-06-02 ch 2, | abuseit's a little odd, but I like it all the same. :) |
| Chuu-chan 2008-05-30 ch 4, | abuseNow I REALLY can't wait till next chapter! Their sex is always so hot! Kyaah! Anyways, I'll see you then! ^^ -Chuu |
| Angelic Fatality 2008-05-25 ch 3, | abusedamn right in the middle of it >_ |
| DRAGONFIRE04 2008-05-25 ch 3, | abusePLEASE UPDATE SOON. I like to see what happen next. I like the story. |
| Chuu-chan 2008-05-24 ch 3, | abuseThose two are so hot! Kya! By the way: you update fast!! (Definite good thing!) I can't wait until the next chapter! See you then. ^^ -Chuu |
| Chuu-chan 2008-05-23 ch 2, | abuseThis story is so hot!! Thanks for the double chapter, by the way. Also, I don't mean to be rude, but it's "lingerie", not "largie". lol Either way, it's definely sexy! Keep up the good writing and please update soon!! (Another funny thing: My boyfriend's name is Ryan! lol) -Chuu |