Maybe this is a fp thing, but it doesn't look like a poem, it's just sentences. If it was on purpose then I don't like it... I would separate it into lines.

I think the poem was slightly ruined for me since I didn't know what kavetch was... lol. I didn't like that, maybe define it at the bottom? However I do agree, sometimes complaining is just what we need and I like that message in this piece.

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