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| My Atomic Garden 2008-07-13 ch 1,  | abuseI liked how you make the main character detached from herself when she cuts herself because it makes the whole thing seem very unintentional, like she knows she cannot stop it. One thing though, I've read your other work and I wonder if "perfect red line of blood," descriptive and effective as it is, could perhaps be changed to a more unused phrase. Overall, very good work. -Peace out. |
| Sexy vampirechick 2008-06-07 ch 1, | abuseI liked this poem.It's emo.Haha.. Very nice that how you lead the reader to the very end.I have a poem similar to that though,I think you portrayed it much better than I did. Only one line bothered me,why does she watches with fear?I thought it was a habit now.That was the only line that got me confused. |
| PrincessPeaches 2008-05-21 ch 1, | abusewow. Powerful poem! |