Wow, it's so very melancholy. Very well written as well. Oh, it's just so sad, though.

The narrator goes through a change of mindset in the first ten lines. In accordance to the pace of the story, it kind of works. The POV gives the reader a feeling of oncoming dread, one that pulls one in so that they must continue reading. The first-person POV is very powerful as the story goes on. Very nice work. However, there is one grammatical error that I see; in the opening line,in 'fiend, murderer!', 'Fiend' should be captalized. Other than that, your story is absolutely chilling!Good job for your first time writing something like this!