Great job at description. Nice usage of vocabulary. Keep writing!

Good luck with poetry and life. Have a lovely day and a wonderful summer.

Twilight Starr

I think fp messed up bc your title is repeated twice.

I like the phrases "heart-coloured" and "tangerine victory" because it was unique and interesting. I also love the last line because it was very unexpected.

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