Nicely done! Is this inspired by the Gospel of Judas? I've always been curious about Judas, even as a child. And there are so many conflicting stories about him. Anyhow, back to the story--it's interesting that you used dialogue. It gave the story a very poetic touch.

Nice, I liked the part where god says "Everyone sins. You are my child."

Very interesting way to use Judas, great work!

First off - the disclaimer was HIGHlarious! :)

To business - I really liked this piece. It's an interesting idea, and not only did it give this 'ultimate betrayer' a different image, it essentially validated the mistakes that humanity inherently makes... uh, if that makes any sense.

Anyways, really good job on this!

-T.S.

Excellent piece, this - it provokes one to thought :)

Everything I wanted to say just ran out of existence. At this very moment in time, I am incapable of formulating an intelligent comment/arguement, so I'm not even going to bother.

I don't have to tell you it's good work, right? ;)

Good self-containment. No more and no less than you need.

Love the disclaimer. ;D And the ending. The whole piece is a little bit confusing, but I love that God insists that Judas is his child. I just really love it. :)

First off I love the disclaimer because it's hysterical

. But–to be a disciple... why a period?

I think this should be T with the whole noose thing, personally. I have to say this confused me. What did he do? Who did he kill? Why did that make it a better world? I did not like being confused. I did however like the ending because it's very sweet and beautiful.

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hahaha, i love your disclaimer. XD

ahem.

nice job with your interpretation on what happened to judas. i loved your open ending - it was hopeful and up for interpretation. :)

i liked how it was kind of sparse and vague... it left a lot up to the imagination. :)

there's a weird break between "cared for him" and ". But" - i don't know if that's what you wanted, but it breaks the flow of the piece... O.o

anyway, nice job. :) keep writing!

-Lefty

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Oh, this piece is so very sweet! I absolutely love te promising ending you had. It really touch me. Great job on that!

I think a little more detail would have made the piece even more powerful. You have a great bit here, so perhaps a little more substance would make it even better! Just a though. I really liked it! I'm going to have to favorite this one!

If only Judas had been so lucky. In the gospels when Jesus tells his disciples that one of them will betray him, Judas says like the others it will not be me, and then Jesus tells him "yes it is you, and it will be better for you to never have been born." You did not write a good one shot though. Will there be more to follow?

I liked it!