simply amazing.
Keep it up :)

wowowow.

you amaze me.

I really, really like this. I love the way that there are no capitals and few punctuations whatsoever in the whole piece. It's like reading someone's thought continuously. Creepy in a way. And I also liked the way you seperated the paragraphs. It somehow adds to the piece. Very good job.

There is such depth to this piece. Not only does it tell a story of being at an airport and seeing others off, but it has such meaning beyond that, or to me it does.

The mechanics of this piece were very nicely done. The first stanza was a very interesting attention grabber and a good way to start this off. The rhythm and flow within are done in a way that the reader doesn't need to pay full attention to them and therefore leaves more time to enjoy the words, imagery, and emotions rather than direct her attention to how one line becomes the next line.

The second to loast stanza sets up the reader to believe that everything will turn out good in the end, in a hopeful sense--then the last stanza shoots all that down. The last stanza was expertly done and was a very good closing to a good piece.

I enjoyed this piece immensely. It was great work of a very talented poet.

-stix-

I really liked the opening and how it introduced the rest of the poem, where you elaborate. Your poem captures everything that is going on around the speaker as well as how trapped he/she feels. My favorite stanza was the third to last because it was very fresh and alive sounding. It definitely put across the spontaneity that the person wants to exhibit.

yes, i know that feeling.

'because i
have only roots and no room
to spread my wings.'- i have no idea why, but i really like those lines. even in other situations in my life, these lines would be applicable.

and your last paragraph is stunner. i really like it.

[and heya again, its been long since i've read your work ;) ]

I like this piece a lot because I just like the whole idea of the plane and how you use it. It's really great. I also like the repetition of i am tired because it really drives the point home. Beautiful piece.

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this touches deep...quite heart-breaking. A common wish, to leave all behind and to just fly far, far away to some great unknown.

"they would never care to hear my story//that it hurts too much//to be left//behind" Flawless. Great job, as always.