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Reviews For: Firefly

Chidori Nadare 2008-07-11 ch 1,	abuse[review game] I like that little rhyme on the first two line because it's not so common within that structure. I don't like how it reads though because...I don't know... it feels lacking in a way even though the imagery is really pretty and cute. -C.N
.mate.feed.kill.repeat. 2008-07-10 ch 1,	abuse[review game: easy fix] This one is super light-hearted but it feels like it could have SO much more to it. =] It's really beautiful. I'd love to see if you could continue on with it. Hmm. The last line doesn't do much for me. It seems to ...plain. It doesn't seem to hold the beauty and wonder that you were trying to make it show. But I also don't know too much about haiku so maybe it did it exactly how you had intended. I love your work. It's really nice to read. -stix-
painted eyes 2008-07-06 ch 1,	abuseI love how this feels as if you're reading a fairytale, instead of a haiku, I don't know if that was the idea, but it feels like it! I love the image of fairies carrying stars!
dragonflydreamer 2008-06-21 ch 1,	abuseFreebie review! Insects are so inspiring, aren't they? points to pen name Haha. This is a very nice haiku. The imagery is very beautiful. I love the second line "Carried by fairies so light." It's a very interesting way to describe fireflies. The last line felt a little blunt compared to the other too, though. Personally, I don't feel that you need to actually mention the word "firefly" at all, but that's just me. Wonderful work as always ^_^
groovi-gal-numba1 2008-06-13 ch 1,	abusereveiw game - depth hey! all of your posts are poems not stories - so you should really be on the poem reveiw game thing, but dw. haha i'll review you anyway :) i don't know how in depth i can go with a haiku but i'll do my best i love the first three lines. the thought of fireflys being fairies that carry stars down by night - aww it makes you melt, doesn't it? :) Good use of metatphors! the imagery you set up is really beautiful however, i don't like the last line - amazing firefly's. i think it ruins the poem, don't you think? "amazing firefly's" sounds silly. i realise it would have been hard to tie the poem off proporly seeing as its a haiku, but i think it could have been better handled. but good job anyway :)
AlexSanguine 2008-06-11 ch 1,	abuseAw...I love the vision this shows. I can just see the fireflies as fairies. Really cute and sweet. I love haikus.
Hammer83 2008-06-08 ch 1,	abuseI asked myself, what is a Haiku? Then I read this and thought ah. I'm now a fan ha ha, really brought a smile to my face, cheers Stoo
Briar's Thorn 2008-06-06 ch 1,	abusei like it short but sweet. i love the way you related faeries to fireflys. i have always considered fireflys to be a type of faerie. very nicely done. thanks for the review by the by, it means alot.
simpleplan13 2008-06-06 ch 1,	abuseI like this a lot, especially the second line because it was a beautiful and interesting way to describe fireflies. However I didn't like the last line. I felt like the title already told us the piece was about fireflies and you could've used that last line for some more great imagery. But other than that I really liked the piece.
Breaks-like-crystal 2008-05-30 ch 1,	abuseReally like the first 2 lines
miscellanea 2008-05-27 ch 1,	abuseooh that's really good! nice concept, i love it!
kloun doll 2008-05-24 ch 1,	abusewhen I finished reading I just thought I like this!

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