I love your writing, possibly because of the mood? It's very bleak and city like, grey, sort of amusing in a cynical way ;]

I've been reviewing on your stories, thinking that you just wrote everything this year or last year, but it turned out that you started about six flipping years ago... And your latest story was written last year. I feel like I was left out on some thing important. I'm extremely sad that you haven't been writing.

Anyways, I think you have matured in writing. :) I know that you probably hear a lot of that already... I read you previous stories over and over, and I just read this one now, and you seem to be good at describing things now. And you place even more emotions too, but you still keep things real. It isn't cliche, and it's a new story. I hope to write like you someday.

wow. I don't think I'll ever allow a single white guy to ever ** me if that's how it is. I love the line about Jay and how that's the only dreadlocked white guy she can't hate, I found that funny and endearing. This was a good one-shot. I hope you don't look back and hate it. I like that Angie doesn't do a ** 180 and all of a sudden grow a back-bone; I like that she takes his ** thorogh out the piece. It's realistic if she's taken it for that long. "I could go back to Atlanta. Stay away from white guys. Transfer to Spelman and learn to be a strong black woman or something." One of the best lines I've ever read, ever. Seriously that was hilarious, but it also had an undeercurrent of truth. That could be because of my own life stuff but whatever this is a good story don't hate it please.

i miss your writing! and then your last two pieces have been about grls who get screwed over by men which just leaves me feeling sad and disapointed. wont' you start writing again?

I really like this. Your writing seems to be a lot more mature in this one than the other stories. I am pretty sure I have read everything you have wrote, but I fail at reviewing. I may go back an find there was something I missed and review that too.
I love the way you write, and the characters you create. When I read any of your stories, I start to believe in the characters, and fall into your imaginary world. It's almost, like, magical :)
I really hope you write more stories, they are completely amazing. You have such natural talent, you must publish a novel or something. That'd be awesome.
I hope there is a super surprise, super awesome flash of inspiration in your genius mind, and then you write a story that momentarily fills my literary void! Then I won't be terribly bored anymore! It's a perfect plan!
You should totally go along with it, okay?
-Jacquie

Do not be discouraged. I think this is a piece of strong writing and it seems clear that you've been doing it for a while. It never seems like you write just for the sake of filling up space. It all advances the plot or provides information about the characters.

I think a good weapon of yours used throughout the story was humor. I liked Angela's sarcastic sense of humor. It helped define her personality.

Hi, I don't review or anything because I'm a shitbag, but I would like to point out that the fact that I (and others) are still coming back to check your page after a two year hiatus suggests that your writing is not crap. That it is, in fact, rather good. If I actually knew you, I'd probably tell you to get over yourself, but seeing as how I don't, I won't be that rude. Thanks for the writing. I'll probably be back.

So I read the author's note after thinking how wonderful this was, and was a little thrown off. I can't believe that you think you're terrible. Most of my writing is just rambling and I post it just because I like the ideas that my writing brings out. You actually create a real story with great characters. Much more talented than myself. Ok enough of that.

I think what made this great was the fact that pretty much everyone can relate to your characters. I have a friend that behaves a lot like angela, and another friend named leslie! hahaha. anyways. Sadly, I think I resemble Nick a little bit. Why am I telling you this?? I certainly have no idea, maybe you'll laugh at me for this, but oh well!

Holy **, you're back. Your hiatus was unbearable.

Please keep writing, you're one of my favorite writers on this site.

You style has changed slightly, but I still love it. And I think it's brilliant.

i'm glad to see you're back! :sob: this is awful! and not the writing but the frustration in it! the same destruction cycle that never ends. it makes me wanna cry because i know exactly what she means. you're a great writer. i hope you'll update more often!

I am so happy you are writing again! I stumbled across your work while you were on your hiatus and I was extremely impressed with the fluidity of your prose. Reading your work now, I can say I am still equally as impressed.

This may seem a bit intrusive, but I think you judge yourself too harshly. You're really very talented and I know how hard that is to believe when you're lost in the details.
It happens to me as well.
The first time I read something I write I will usually be OK with it, but then every time after that I will see more and more of its flaws. This goes on until i can't even bear to read it again and I eventually burn all evidence of its existence.
I've had to train myself to stop this destructive behavior. It's just a symptom of focusing on the subtle nuances instead of the big picture, because after doing it for too long you get lost in peculiarities.

I think it's a waste that your high-focus, attention to detail should cause you to lose passion for writing or question yourself, I want to ensure you that you really are one of the more skilled writers I've seen, definitely on this site and even in the outside world.
So next time you're slouched behind a computer screen or a notepad seeing all those self-created flaws, I hope you remember the simple truth that you are in fact talented, and i hope you allow it to be a part of your reality;
I hope it works as a life raft before you drown in the details.

You wrote! I like the phrase "serial-killer handwriting." I've never heard that before. You kept the characters pretty solid. I know a guy that is exactly like Nick so it was cool to see this situation because that is nearly what would have happened. It's the reason I try to have nothing to do with him. He has heard so many excuses from me as to why I am unavailable - I have a lot of homework to do, I'm sick, and I have to go to a friend's show being the last ones. Anyways, good sickening stuff - sickening because it shouldn't happen that way. Some guys really do suck, huh? The ones that don't try are probably the only ones that are worth it.

This is great, I love your work and I'm so glad you're writing again. At first I was slightly confused as to what the relationship between Nick and Angie was actually like, however that only spurred me on until the ending, which I loved. Do you think this will be something you could continue? I hope so, although it does work well as a one-shot. Great work - Rhian.

Aw, poor her, I think.

Anyways, is Ellery College supposed to be Emery College? I looked up Ellery since I've never heard of it (I go to school in Boston too).

I am so ** happy that you are updating again! Well, it's only one update, but I hope that it is a sign of more to come. Your style is slightly different in the time between pieces, but it is still wonderful to read, a little older. I'm always a big fan, and always excited to see what you have to say. Thanks a lot for putting this up, it is fantastic, and please continue writing!