This was another good chapter filled with descriptions aplenty. I only wish that it was a tad bit longer.

This is looking very good so far. It seems very thought out and it seems to of been executed in a logical fashion, unlike my stories, which are made up on the go and vary wildly in pace.

An interesting couple of chapters. These zones are rather intriguing, a force that mutates animals and turns plants into geometrical shapes. Its rather intriguing. No problems I notice but the soldiers seem a little quiet, there's got to be one loudmouth in the group.

Kdh.

For some reason, this reminds me of starcraft meets hamlet. Tight prose. You throw the reader right into the action, which works great for a prologue. Is this going to be its own story, a one-shot thing, perhaps dropping a hint for tabernacle, or is it simply a daily writing exercise?

Nothing like a bolt to the head to start off a story. I'm interested so far and it looks okay gramatically and such.

Kdh.