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this is really nice - i like how it's not the typical dark poem that you read. :) it has hope at the end, and friendship, too. :)

at first, i thought you were trying to rhyme (blue and too) but i guess not... it kind of messed up my reading of the poem, though. ^_^;;

i thought that the repetition of promise (in those two middle lines) was a bit... well... repetitive. perhaps a synonym?

otherwise, good job. keep writing!

-Lefty

I don't like that you only put a period at the end because the whole piece is not one sentence. I might add some more punctuation. I do like this piece because the description is good and you never say what the promise is, so it is up for interpretation.

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Aww this is really sweet!
It's great when change DOESN'T get in the way of a great friendship. Horrible when it does!