 BlackestOpal 2008-05-26 . chapter 1Oh, wow.
Amazing.
"I write undelivered letters
for undelivered chances"
That's just spectacular.
I think, though, that it might work better if you added a period after "undelivered chances" and started a new sentence with because.
It really doesn't make much of a difference, but I'm trying to concrit instead of just gush about how much I love it.
Fantastic job. |