RM prize review!

I'll just say up front that I rarely review poetry, so this won't exactly be a prize winning review.

This is a very lovely poem. It is a very interesting topic to write about. I like how you give so much meaning to certain objects. The objects you chose are just random, everyday things, but you made them mean so much more.

The second stanza confused me. It feels like your jumping between times, making them hard to distinguish. I got so caught up in trying to figure that out that the meaning was completely lost on me, so I had to go back and reread it.

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this, which I can very rarely say for poems. Beautiful work.

Awesome idea to write about! I don't connect this to relationships so much as individuality, one's place in the world, in history, and you weave some very apt images for it. "physicality sheened in precious laminate" gave me a good chuckle, and I loved the description of history as "absentminded." :D

This wasn't my favorite piece of yours, I have to say. I think from you I just expect really amazing images and slight abstraction, but this didn't have too much of that.

I also didn't like a few specific parts.
-First stanza... why would you freshly embroider old socks. That seems odd to me. Also the second line made it seem almost like you were looking into the future, which I don't think you were.
-Second stanza... When you were describing the key I thought the fourth line was how it was now, but then you say it vanished. Did you mean the S because that confused me or did you mean the key?
-Third stanza... You say birth, but you mean birth date, which sounds odd to me because when I hear birth I think of like class, etc. Also, I was confused as to why you had a post it note with a return address on it. Unless that was referring to something you had in your wallet?

Anyhow I did like your word choice, which as always was really awesome. I also liked the ending... it tied the piece together, but also introduced kinda a new idea. I also loved the part about the permanent marker because it was a really interesting description.

I really like the idea of this poem.

"but permanent marker
cannot be a misnomer these days."

That's my favorite. You really chose your words carefully and it really paid off in the end. I hadn't really thought how temporary everything is.