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Luna October Wolf 2008-07-07 . chapter 1
This is very unique. I'm not really sure why, but I like it for some odd reason, especially the line:

with your wings dripping down your back.

I'm not sure if you meant to or not, but in the fourth line of the second stanza, you wrote 'just this once' as one word. If this was a mistake, it should be fixed. If it's not, then you should maybe consider doing a few more words like that, because it doesn't seem to flow with the rest. Anyway, good job.
~Myself
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