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DyeAddict 2008-06-23 . chapter 1
Figured considering you just added me as a fav author, I may as well be nice and go read some of your stuff.
And wow am I glad I did! Love this poem, the raw power through each word and the brilliant symbolism it congures [sp?] up. I really like it.
Pinkliquor 2008-06-21 . chapter 1
Interesting how you would put 'not' in for 'no' in the last few verses. I've never seen it done and i like it very much.
SickButPretty 2008-05-28 . chapter 1
I loved the way you described being alone, how numb it makes you feel, how sort of, inadequate I guess. The way you used the physical analogy (the muscles, flesh affected) conveys how deeply depression or these types of negative feelings can penetrate. Well done.
BlackestOpal 2008-05-26 . chapter 1
The poem is beautiful.
It's very heart-wrenching.
I have one suggestion.
If you are going to capitalize Alone at the end, then capitalize Beautiful as well. It just seems like the word Beautiful would have more consequence that way.

"My body is a tomb stone, an epitaph; my soul is bare upon naked skin"
I loved that line so much. It's amazing.
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