 SickButPretty 2008-05-28 . chapter 1I loved the way you described being alone, how numb it makes you feel, how sort of, inadequate I guess. The way you used the physical analogy (the muscles, flesh affected) conveys how deeply depression or these types of negative feelings can penetrate. Well done. |
 BlackestOpal 2008-05-26 . chapter 1The poem is beautiful.
It's very heart-wrenching.
I have one suggestion.
If you are going to capitalize Alone at the end, then capitalize Beautiful as well. It just seems like the word Beautiful would have more consequence that way.
"My body is a tomb stone, an epitaph; my soul is bare upon naked skin"
I loved that line so much. It's amazing. |