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~ H e y !

Well I've got to say, I really admire you for writing this much. ^^ I personally could never have done it. I've got no patience at all I'm afraid =[ LoLz

Anyways, I liked the plot to this. I liked it a lot actually. It was unique and you put an interesting twist in it. Kudos!

The dialog though, was by far my favorite element. You put in the right breaks and made it flow without making it seem choppy. And it was authentic, like someone really was talking. ^^

Good Work!

- K a i y a k o

P.S. I also really liked the names for some reason. Kaname && Hikaru, so cute! LoLz. ^^

I think I like this story the most out of the others. I personally like your choice of names but I think the way you describe your characters need more consistency. But I really enjoyed reading this! Especially the scenes nearing the end, they were really really nice. For it to be your first time to write narravtive prose, it's really good, keep writing to improve! I hope to read more of your works ^^

a very sad love story... please have a sequel... maybe about their child being in love?