| Reviews for The Velvet Ribbon |
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R. Ficst 5/17/12 . chapter 11GREAT story! I love your characters! Cute epilogue, too, - I like how you tied in the guys from your other story. Looks like a hint towards who's involved in the next ones, too! Thanks so much for posting, I'm really enjoying everything so far! |
Drown Me In Blue 10/19/11 . chapter 11This was beautiful and very sweet. I loved Imrad's testiness and overall character, and the was his blind date actually (finally) worked. This kind of story makes me wish for an entire set of background stories, all written in your lovely style! Thank you, this was a very enjoyable way to avoid my midterm essays. . Blue |
Blackers 6/25/11 . chapter 10Ok. When did they move from a cafe ...to private quarters. While holding the same conversation. |
ducky 2/15/11 . chapter 1 i usually dont write long reviews ya know. but, i read the silver umbrella and this chapter after, so id like to let u know that i think youve grown as a writer. there were a number of awkward grammatical errors in the umbrella, though i did quite adore the plot idea. this one is much better grammatically, with only one mistake i can spot. at the end, 'mean' should be 'meant.' also, u have some fantastic ideas floating around in ur brain. i would say that u should definitely keep writing and focus on better relaying the depth of ur characters feelings/thoughts to the reader. also i think you should make conversations flow more human-like. the ending of The Silver Umbrella in particular could be edited in a way that would sate a readers appetite like the last spoonful of chocolate mousse. ROCK ON! :D |
Raiya-shi 8/30/10 . chapter 1Highly entertaining! Thanks for the up - |
pygmy owl 8/15/10 . chapter 1oh, oops, I just realized I read story 3 before story 2! I hope to see more of Vane and Miguel. Off to read now. :-) |
PyroTech 7/21/10 . chapter 11that was cute. I loved it. |
Shiri-Matakami 6/13/10 . chapter 11Must comment that these are absolutely adorable. And I might be in love with how you made the spells. Time pausing for the time of ten breaths? Made my heart skip a beat. I love learning all about the little things that make magic or spells tic in everyone's worlds. It might be my favorite part. Except for the nookie. That is also quite awesome. Good story lovey. |
September's Nobara 8/29/09 . chapter 1 Let me jump right into this and say how much I really enjoyed the dialogue and the character interaction; the balance between each was perfect. Also, the way the demise of the apple was described helped with the visualization of the scene. Wonderful work with pacing the discoveries of Imrad's preference, ability, and overall personality. Nothing felt rushed, and the way you went about the establishing of other characters' personalities was a great touch. Beautiful work, all in all. Sincerely, September's Nobara. |
elyrian 3/10/09 . chapter 11I like this one, too. Very sweet, it made me smile! I liked seeing Anthony and Jamie at the end, too! |
calabra silverwolf 10/12/08 . chapter 11Ah, I love this story. In fact I liked it so much I had to read it again. It was really well done, thank you for posting this. |
DeadnightWarrior 8/22/08 . chapter 11Oh, I loved this story as well! I absolutely adore the way you write, making the reader feel the feelings of the characters... Someday, I'll be able to do that, too :) I think I'll end up faving all of your stories if this keeps up... but I doubt you mind, eh? Thank you for this reading pleasure, see you on a next story I decide to read! ;) |
Qui 7/28/08 . chapter 11so...cute... words are not enough. |
Serph 6/7/08 . chapter 11I have to say I very much loved reading this story. Very well written with strong characterisations and definitely not your typical slash fiction. Loved it XD |
Felinity 6/6/08 . chapter 11aw soo cute, i'm so glad they got their happy ending :) |