 Laeden 2008-05-28 . chapter 1It's an interesting start for a prologue.
I see it going into more detail, some backround information into the first chapter, perhaps some back-track?
Also, first person is an extremely difficult POV to write from. Don't forget to put a lot of personality in there. The little quarks people have become a lot more important in first person than third, espeically sayings that people have, and say all the time. Though there's really not much here to review. |