great chapter, I can't wait for more, please update soon! I really want t find out about Aubrey

Hi, I'm xVampireMistressx, and I'm from Quizilla. I absoluetly adore your strory and would want nothing more for you to make more and more and more and more chapters. I really like your story, in fact, I'm already hooked to it, Please, I'm begging you, please make more chapters. And I think your a gifted writer and hope to see you in the near furture. I want to be a best selling author too. Trust me, I don't take writing for granted and am told that I have a gift for words. I have a story on Quizilla called The Beautiful and the UGly and I would really like for you to read it. And after you dp, please message me. Oh, and agin, please write more chapters for Love Eternal, it's a very good story with an interseting plot.

Wow, this story is simply amazing, I really love it. You have a wonderful talent and I am truly looking forward to reading more of this story.

OMG Katie me luv X3 thank you for the link *glomps* I wuvish you

Erik seems a but too perfect for my likely and Savannah seems a bit too unknowing for my tastes as well. I don't hate them as characters, I'm just not really feeling them. I'm sure it won't stay that way, but right now it seems that Erik is perfect, She loves him, and they'll live happily ever after.

That brings me to the plot. There doesn't appear to be any plot other than Cross seducing Savannah, which is surprisingly harder for him than most other women. However, he seems capable to restraining himself. This chapter comes with a bit of mystery: how he knew her clothing size. His explanation was less than satisfactory, so he's clearly hiding something.

The dialog is nicely done. Even though I believe what they are saying is a tad boring, how they're saying is written well. It doesn't really feel contrived or bland at all.

Even though I'm not hooked, I did really enjoy this chapter. Things are really progressing slowly (I'm beginning to question whether there is any progress), the dialog and descriptions kept me interested throughout.

I don't like vampires as characters becuase they seem like a catch-all archetype. That being said, Erik Cross is a likable enough character. So much better than cliched boring one-note vampires I've read all too many times. However, the shining star was Savannah. A beautiful character.

The descriptions were done wonderfully, but I don't believe you gave a description on the birthmark, only its location. I was a little dismayed that I didn't know what it looked like. I suppose it's appearance isn't important, only it's existence.

Now, the relationship between Erik and Savannah has just started, but I can tell that it will be interesting and enjoyable to read. I always love reading stories with low self-esteem characters being helped by the unlikely.

Plot. Is there a plot? The relationship is the plot. If that's all there is, then I might lose interest. It depends how good of a writer you are. However, if it's more than just a relationship, (Cross has a life outside of Savannah, right?) then i can see this being a wonderful little story.

i love this new chapter cant wait for chapter 4

OMG! this story was so awesome! I couldn't stop reading it once I started it reminds me SOO MUCH of myself! Savannah I mean lol but yeah this story is really good! keep up the good work =3

awe isn't that nice of him

He is definitely a haunted man. The title is really matching up to the story now. Nice work. Keep writing.

~Twilight Starr~

Wow, interesting turn. I kind of heard the 'jaws music' playing in my head near the end. Interesting.

~nicola~

This was a very good opening for the story. Most of the time, opening chapters are just there to set things up and nothing much happens but your's is quite different. In fact, your's is just the opposite as a key point of the story occurs!

I'm ususally not a big fan of vampiric tales but you seem to be putting some new ideas into an old concept, which I like. It's always good to see people keeping stuff interesting and I think you've accomplished that.

One thing that is very good is your point of view from Savannah. You've captured her feelings and emotions of captivity perfectly, sometihng I must commend.

Improvement wise, I'd say work on the dialouge a bit? I'm not sure, it might just be because Eric and Savannah have just met or because it's the master-servant relationship but their dialouge seems somewhat forced.

I'll probably come read other chapters later. Keep up the good work!

So savannah is his reincarnated mate perhaps?
reincarnated Aubrey? lol
i love the story :D keep it up!
and PLEASE UPDATE!

Erik is adorable :D

"why are your breathing" should be "why are you're breathing".

I wonder what his secret is. I hope you get inspired to write on this some more. :D

~Twilight Starr~