Oh, this sent a shiver down my spine! It was written very well, however, I thought the last sentence was out of place, and felt disjointed. Other than that, I liked the way the story was in bits and pieces and then finally pulled together at the end. Perhaps you could've added more description, maybe show the ghosts of all the others who have died...

~ Sakina x

So, this is the next story I picked, and what do you know...
It's AMAZING!
I'm like absolutely in love with your writing! =)
I liked this one alot, it's the kind of story that really gets me going.
I can't really say anything bad other then...
shouldn't there be a question mark here 'But wait, how could I be struggling if my body was paralyzed.' and near the end you wrote faced, instead of faces.
Looking forward to more!
Oh! and I loove this -> 'There I was, my long black hair, lifeless, my green eyes rolled back…my limbs, dangling ten feet above me. Swinging slowly, back and forth, I began to feel sick, my stomach churning, ready to throw up. Nothing came of the feeling, and my eyes never left the body, hanging from the ceiling.'

Review Game!

I like how this story is mainly focused on her thoughts. It makes the action confusing--in a good way! It reveals enough to keep the reader going, but the mystery is intriguing enough to make the reader wonder what's going to happen next.

My only suggestion would be to watch out of your comma usage. There were a lot of places where there was one where no punctuation was needed, some in place of periods, and I think one that should have been a semi-colon. I'm sorry, I didn't take note of the specific examples. I'd just suggest looking it over again.

Very nice job.

There were a couple of parts that I thought we a bit awkward. It interrupted the flow becuase I found myself going back and rereading a sentence or two, because I didn't quite get it the first time.

That's the only critique, however. Horror had never been something that came easy to me. It seemed to come natural to you, however, and that made for an enjoyable read, especially the narration. Good work.

Okay, there were some issues with this one. So much was going on that I felt I had trouble following what was happening. There are some word choices that could be rethought of.
For example: "“Madison!” his voice is strong, brave, but didn’t sound like it was ready to hear the truth about life."
I think what you were going for was "naive"
Also, I would consider reworking your summary. Try reading it out loud once or twice, there was something awkward about it that might deter people from reading.
Good Luck
Arreana

I liked how we're going through Madison's thought process and feelings to add to this horror. Your descriptions also fit this horror genre. It surely does have a Western feel to it then anything else.
Hm, I'd look out for tense issues and a bit of grammar. They got in the way of what was mostly a good flow. The sentences had some variation, which made things a little better.

IMadison./ - I think italics already work as they do... you don't need the I bits as I saw in all of italic things.