yes, i aggree...

YOURE GOING TO CALIFORNIA AND YOU HAVENT TOLD ME ABOUT THIS??

p.s. whats my birthday present?

This was really nice! I really liked how you made the lines rhyme, and the words you used! I liked that it wasn't such a heavy message this time, and it was portrayed really well! Keep writing!
The Reverse Edge Blade

only one thing to say, and that is YAY!

yes a lot of people will be able to relate to this and as always very good writing :)