And so, the high school life begins... (grinning)

Who knows why Makoto decided to go in for the kill on a first year like Hitomi. Probably thinking he can get whatever girl he sets his eyes on. Pft, like she'll surrender to that. We all know she's stubborn for her own good and that persona of hers is still there.

Yay, Sayoko and Aiko are in as well. It's nice for those two to tease Hitomi because it shows how close they are. And ne, it's nice to see Aiko and Hitomi being like this because they're not like this with each other often; normally, they would fight and challenge each other whatever way possible. I can picture in the original YnH that they would get along with each other like this when they're alone together.

And heh, the memory of a ten-year-old boy and the promise... The same concept, only a little different here. I look forward to hearing what's the promise in here.

I'm glad this took a different turn, really. You really do expect the jerk to take the main girl's first kiss in a shoujo manga and, yet, hehe... Looks like the tsundere persona is still kept intact. Glad that Makoto got slapped for such.

(smiles) Hehe, Rai getting teased because of Miyu. Yay, I sense a development between those two later on. And, as always, Takafumi being an otaku. XD Nice to see that he made a Gundam model this time.

(snickers) And, of course, the verbal argument between Hitomi and Makoto. And Keiya defending Hitomi, yay. I wonder what Makoto holds against Keiya, though, but that has yet to be revealed as well. And HAH, Makoto got told off by Miyu! That's what you get!

And, of course, Hitomi complaining of Makoto to Aiko and Sayoko. XP Who could blame her, really?

And Midorikawa-sensei... XD Oh, good Lord. I don't know whether to cry or laugh about him too. In a way, he sort of reminds me of Dr. Stein from Soul Eater; ya know, when he was first introduced before he became a teacher in Shibusen. But geez... A bomb detonator? AND he wants the fifty page exam done perfectly? What are you, nuts!?

XD But something tells me he's joking about this... And that the bomb detonator is fake...

And I see patterns of you switching between surname first and first name last and the other way around. Make up your mind already. Because I can see it through out this chapter. For me, it's surname first and first name last because it's traditional. And besides... For some reason, it sounds natural sounding. XD Maybe because it's so odd to put a Japanese first name and last name like so just because we're in America.

Anyway, looking forward to the next chapter. And... Hah... XD My pride's a little hurt here (sort of). Because it seems that your story's popular than mine... (sticks out tongue) Oh well, maybe I should just continue to write my project, despite this, because it seems that it's only me that cares about it.

Great work cant wait chapter 3

This story is very very intresting. ^^ It's quite funny too? You could make this into a manga comic, I would buy it. Great work! Gonna read chapter 2.

Ah, about time this was up. And ya know, you could've give credit to me through my penname, even though that is my nickname, anyway... But, then again, the people who'll be reading this won't know it's an alternate story of the original...

Nonetheless, though, I like where this is going. And I notice you used Aoi as the name of Hitomi's Shinigami form in there and we both know why that is. (coughs) The only thing that I can see is some typos, but it looks good so far. Hehe, I like how the three guys interact with each other, especially when Rai whacked Takafumi during his speech and both were teasing Keiya on seeing Aoi, assuming that he likes Gothic Lolita.

XD And Takafumi is such a lovable otaku. The flashlight bit is a nice touch, considering it shows that he's obsessed with manga to the point he would read it in the dark with the flashlight as his only light source. That and when he gives the speech about how the main shoujo girl chooses the tsundere-like guy in the end instead of the nice guy.

XD Which is an irony because this is exactly what this manga is about: To show that the nice guy will finish first instead of last to the ** this time. Which is probably why it'll end in a certain pairing... (coughing yet again)

Anyway, I look forward to the next chapter. And do give proper credit next time too!

A nice start before all the action,blood,violence and perverted misunderstandings which you will all mix in the next chapters hahaha Seriously though, I liked how the story is not too long that the story drags on for a while. It's straight to the point but still provides ample material to keep readers interested. The only thing I can point out is that there were some typos. Better check on those man. Keep on working on this one I'm rooting for you. Damn, that inspired me to push through my Fanfic as well hahaha. Can't be helped since I've been busy to work on for now. Anyway keep it up and don't slack off. Look, Hitomi is standing behind you waving her kendo practice sword XD

i gotta say this is really a very good fic...=) well first things first, i can't really take my eyes off it when i was reading the first part...=) great job! i'm looking forward for an update! =) i would greatly value your review in my story...if you would like...=)